His sentence:
It shatters God's world into smaller and smaller pieces in quest of meaning...and all is finds is more questions.
From Angels and Demons by Dan Brown.
He uses the (...) to let the first part of the sentence really sink in before going on to drive his argument home.
My sentence:
She does puzzles with more and more pieces in the search for a challenge...all she finds is a bigger puzzle.
Monday, October 12, 2009
Sentence 6
His sentence:
Does science hold anything sacred?
From Angles and Demons by Dan Brown.
He uses this rhetorical question to raise the question of the humility of science: addressing science as a living growing thing rather than just a subject.
My sentence:
Does basketball show no mercy?
Does science hold anything sacred?
From Angles and Demons by Dan Brown.
He uses this rhetorical question to raise the question of the humility of science: addressing science as a living growing thing rather than just a subject.
My sentence:
Does basketball show no mercy?
Sentence 5
His sentence:
Even the technology that promises to unite us, divides us.
From Angels and Demons by Dan Brown.
He uses two juxtaposed, contrasting words to describe more effectively the downfall of this type of technology.
My sentence:
Even the players that promised to help us, hurt us.
Even the technology that promises to unite us, divides us.
From Angels and Demons by Dan Brown.
He uses two juxtaposed, contrasting words to describe more effectively the downfall of this type of technology.
My sentence:
Even the players that promised to help us, hurt us.
Sentence 4
His sentence:
Silence.
From Angels and Demons by Dan Brown.
He uses this one word to describe a whole scene in the story.
My Sentence:
Chaos.
Silence.
From Angels and Demons by Dan Brown.
He uses this one word to describe a whole scene in the story.
My Sentence:
Chaos.
Sentence 3
His sentence:
Medicine, electronic communications, space travel, genetic manipulation...these are the miracles about which we tell our children.
From Angels and Demons by Dan Brown
The (...) shows a long pause after the first part of the sentence. This was probably put in so show the building of suspense added by the speaker.
My sentence:
Catching, running, throwing, kicking...these are the techniques about which our coaches speak of.
Medicine, electronic communications, space travel, genetic manipulation...these are the miracles about which we tell our children.
From Angels and Demons by Dan Brown
The (...) shows a long pause after the first part of the sentence. This was probably put in so show the building of suspense added by the speaker.
My sentence:
Catching, running, throwing, kicking...these are the techniques about which our coaches speak of.
Wednesday, October 7, 2009
Sentence 2
His sentence:
Terrorism, has a single goal.
From Angels and Demons by Dan Brown
The comma after terrorism is not needed. It was put in the sentence though to signify a short pause between the two parts of the sentence.
My sentence:
Bob, had a single remark.
Terrorism, has a single goal.
From Angels and Demons by Dan Brown
The comma after terrorism is not needed. It was put in the sentence though to signify a short pause between the two parts of the sentence.
My sentence:
Bob, had a single remark.
Friday, September 25, 2009
Sentence a Day
SENTENCE 1
His sentence:
Carlo could not get enough…the silence…the floating…seeing his mother’s face in the billowing white clouds as he soared to earth.
from Angels and Demons by Dan Brown.
The disconnected ellipsis emulates the dream-like state that Carlo is in as he experiences skydiving.
My sentece:
Bill could not stand it anymore…the torment…the pain…feeling helpless as he watched the prisoner of war tortured.
His sentence:
Carlo could not get enough…the silence…the floating…seeing his mother’s face in the billowing white clouds as he soared to earth.
from Angels and Demons by Dan Brown.
The disconnected ellipsis emulates the dream-like state that Carlo is in as he experiences skydiving.
My sentece:
Bill could not stand it anymore…the torment…the pain…feeling helpless as he watched the prisoner of war tortured.
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