Sentence 12

His sentence:
Are we obsolete?
From Angels and Demons by Dan Brown.

He uses this rhetoric question to raise the question of the outreach of the Catholic religion.

My sentence: Can you there?

Sentence 11

His sentence:
Science, you say, will save us.
From Angels and Demons by Dan Brown

He sets off "you say" with commas to show the procession of the phrase.

My sentence:
The movie, she said, will change you.

Sentence 10

His sentence:
Somehow, as though the words were flowing from God himself, he spoke the modern language...delivering the ancient message.
From Angels and Demons by Dan Brown.

He juxtaposed two contrasting words to show the complexity of his argument.

My sentence:
Somehow, as if the text was flowing from Shakespeare himself, he wrote the next novel...using the classic style.

Sentence 9

His sentence:
We see UFOs, engage in channeling, spirit contact, out-of-body experiences, mindquests--all these eccentric ideas have a scientific veneer, but they are unashamedly irrational.
From Angels and Demons by Dan Brown.

My sentence:
He sees the hole, starts running, avoids contact, the unforeseeable, linebacker--all these sporadic ideas pass through the tailback's mind, and they are instantaneously processed.

Sentence 8

His sentence:
But you have not won fairly.
From Angels and Demons by Dan Brown.

He starts the sentence with the conjunction "but" so show a big shift in the speakers argument.

My sentence:
But he did not play properly.

Sentence 7

His sentence:
It shatters God's world into smaller and smaller pieces in quest of meaning...and all is finds is more questions.
From Angels and Demons by Dan Brown.

He uses the (...) to let the first part of the sentence really sink in before going on to drive his argument home.

My sentence:
She does puzzles with more and more pieces in the search for a challenge...all she finds is a bigger puzzle.

Sentence 6

His sentence:
Does science hold anything sacred?
From Angles and Demons by Dan Brown.

He uses this rhetorical question to raise the question of the humility of science: addressing science as a living growing thing rather than just a subject.

My sentence:
Does basketball show no mercy?

Sentence 5

His sentence:
Even the technology that promises to unite us, divides us.
From Angels and Demons by Dan Brown.

He uses two juxtaposed, contrasting words to describe more effectively the downfall of this type of technology.

My sentence:
Even the players that promised to help us, hurt us.

Sentence 4

His sentence:
Silence.
From Angels and Demons by Dan Brown.

He uses this one word to describe a whole scene in the story.

My Sentence:
Chaos.

Sentence 3

His sentence:
Medicine, electronic communications, space travel, genetic manipulation...these are the miracles about which we tell our children.
From Angels and Demons by Dan Brown

The (...) shows a long pause after the first part of the sentence. This was probably put in so show the building of suspense added by the speaker.

My sentence:
Catching, running, throwing, kicking...these are the techniques about which our coaches speak of.

Sentence 2

His sentence:
Terrorism, has a single goal.
From Angels and Demons by Dan Brown

The comma after terrorism is not needed. It was put in the sentence though to signify a short pause between the two parts of the sentence.

My sentence:
Bob, had a single remark.